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Pips Manga Work

my sugestions are make her more curvy obiously shes at least 13 due to the size of her breast so she should have curves,fix the expression on her face and the placement of her arms

make sure to post some more work

-round out her face (mainly her chin) more to make her look more feminine. A very angled chin looks masculine.

-her neck should curve out into her shoulders.

-you may want to practice the elements of the face first before putting a face together. try working on the eyes and mouth a little more.

-her chest looks weird because her body is so straight and she doesn't have curves like a girl would. try to bring her waist in more and then extend her hips.

-her arms are very rigid and stick-like. work on the curves of the arms.

-most of her fingers are the same length.

-her braclet should hang down a bit more to show gravity, or even the direction of the wind.

-try adding folds to the clothes to show definition, particulary around the knees.

-her toes are all the same length. work on the shape of the stilettos more.

-her ears are also very round. have a look at the way the ear is shaped.

-also try to "boof" out her hair a bit more to make her face less rigid.

First of all i'd say this was an impovement compared to the first pic you posted. The body pose is much better but still a little akward, mainly because he arms are too short. See, if you stand up you'll notice your elbows are at your hips, so i think her elbows are much too high.

Also there's an improvement on the hair, it has more detail but it still think it's a bit flat. It needs to puff out a bit more unless you intention was to have it like dead straight. But i think it would have been good if you'd remembered to rub out the bit near the neck just to neaten it up a bit. The detail with all the individual chunks of the hair is good though.

The shoulders are pretty good. The next curves more this time. And it's good how you given this character more curves in the hips, but once again I think the chest could be changed. From the way you've drawn it, it's obvious her breasts are there but they could be mistaken for a pattern on the top because there is no cleavage or any shading to define between her neck and where her top begins.

The skirt is pretty good but she looks like she wants to fight so you might wanna put her legs in a stance where she's about to run or attack. This would also be good to show the folds of the material.